1 BDC223 Prose Edit Report

1.1 Scope and approach

Expanded contractions, normalised apostrophes/quotes to ASCII, and standardised spaced em dashes in prose across all BDC223 .qmd files.
Corrected British spelling where clear (e.g., kilometres, vapour), fixed typos, and adjusted grammar/punctuation (Oxford commas) in the edited files listed below.
Converted selected passive constructions to active voice where the subject was clear.

1.2 File-specific edits (highlights)

1.2.1 `BDC223/L00-introduction.qmd`

Reworked multiple paragraphs into active voice and removed contractions for a more formal tone.
Corrected typos (e.g., “introduce”), grammar, and punctuation; normalised dash usage and spacing.
Clarified phrasing around expectations, consultation, and assessments.

1.2.2 `BDC223/L01-worldmapper.qmd`

Cleaned up introduction wording and reduced repetition.
Clarified several sentences for flow, switched passive to active voice, and removed evaluative phrasing (e.g., “overpopulated”).
Standardised terminology (e.g., Global North) and corrected minor style/grammar issues.

1.2.3 `BDC223/BDC223_index.qmd`

Fixed grammar errors (“serves as”), typos (“headings”), and style issues (ad hoc, em dashes).
Standardised time ranges to en dashes and adjusted Term/assessment labels for internal consistency.
Simplified and clarified several guidance paragraphs; improved punctuation and Oxford comma usage.

1.2.4 `BDC223/L02-SA_V.qmd`

Fixed typos (e.g., “Littler and Littler’s”, “centimetres”), spacing errors, and punctuation.
Clarified several long sentences and improved dash spacing in technical explanations.
Corrected freshwater/roots phrasing in seaweed section for accuracy and flow.

1.3 Recommendations, ambiguities, and potential inaccuracies

BDC223/L01-worldmapper.qmd: The paragraph listing “$411$ million people” for Africa in 2050 conflicts with the bracketed note stating a projection of ~$2.5$ billion. Consider removing the $411$ million figure or reconciling the two values.
BDC223/L02-SA_V.qmd: The source platform “eConver” is unclear. If this is a platform name, consider confirming the correct spelling or adding a short clarification.
BDC223/BDC223_index.qmd: Confirm that Term 4 is correct for the Lab Assistant line and that “Class Test 2” on 16 Oct aligns with your assessment plan elsewhere in the module.
BDC223/BDC223_index.qmd: The essay instruction “No internal section headings” may be clearer as “Do not use internal section headings” to avoid any ambiguity.
BDC223/L01-worldmapper.qmd: Consider verifying the exact paper title “A Safe Operating Space for Humanity” and the author spelling (Rockstrom vs. Rockström) to align with your preferred citation style.

1.4 Notes on style consistency

If you want a uniformly formal register, consider replacing colloquial phrases such as “go and download it” and “have a look” (found elsewhere in the BDC223 lectures) with more formal alternatives.
Several long, multi-clause sentences remain in later sections; splitting them could improve readability for students who are new to the material.

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# BDC223 Prose Edit Report ## Scope and approach - Expanded contractions, normalised apostrophes/quotes to ASCII, and standardised spaced em dashes in prose across all BDC223 `.qmd` files. - Corrected British spelling where clear (e.g., kilometres, vapour), fixed typos, and adjusted grammar/punctuation (Oxford commas) in the edited files listed below. - Converted selected passive constructions to active voice where the subject was clear. ## File-specific edits (highlights) ### `BDC223/L00-introduction.qmd` - Reworked multiple paragraphs into active voice and removed contractions for a more formal tone. - Corrected typos (e.g., “introduce”), grammar, and punctuation; normalised dash usage and spacing. - Clarified phrasing around expectations, consultation, and assessments. ### `BDC223/L01-worldmapper.qmd` - Cleaned up introduction wording and reduced repetition. - Clarified several sentences for flow, switched passive to active voice, and removed evaluative phrasing (e.g., “overpopulated”). - Standardised terminology (e.g., Global North) and corrected minor style/grammar issues. ### `BDC223/BDC223_index.qmd` - Fixed grammar errors (“serves as”), typos (“headings”), and style issues (ad hoc, em dashes). - Standardised time ranges to en dashes and adjusted Term/assessment labels for internal consistency. - Simplified and clarified several guidance paragraphs; improved punctuation and Oxford comma usage. ### `BDC223/L02-SA_V.qmd` - Fixed typos (e.g., “Littler and Littler’s”, “centimetres”), spacing errors, and punctuation. - Clarified several long sentences and improved dash spacing in technical explanations. - Corrected freshwater/roots phrasing in seaweed section for accuracy and flow. ## Recommendations, ambiguities, and potential inaccuracies - `BDC223/L01-worldmapper.qmd`: The paragraph listing “$411$ million people” for Africa in 2050 conflicts with the bracketed note stating a projection of ~$2.5$ billion. Consider removing the $411$ million figure or reconciling the two values. - `BDC223/L02-SA_V.qmd`: The source platform “eConver” is unclear. If this is a platform name, consider confirming the correct spelling or adding a short clarification. - `BDC223/BDC223_index.qmd`: Confirm that Term 4 is correct for the Lab Assistant line and that “Class Test 2” on 16 Oct aligns with your assessment plan elsewhere in the module. - `BDC223/BDC223_index.qmd`: The essay instruction “No internal section headings” may be clearer as “Do not use internal section headings” to avoid any ambiguity. - `BDC223/L01-worldmapper.qmd`: Consider verifying the exact paper title “A Safe Operating Space for Humanity” and the author spelling (Rockstrom vs. Rockström) to align with your preferred citation style. ## Notes on style consistency - If you want a uniformly formal register, consider replacing colloquial phrases such as “go and download it” and “have a look” (found elsewhere in the BDC223 lectures) with more formal alternatives. - Several long, multi-clause sentences remain in later sections; splitting them could improve readability for students who are new to the material.